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As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Does the advantage of this for individuals outweigh the disadvantage for the environment?

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In contemporary society, the usage of private
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 abruptly increased when nations advance economically. There is a contentious argument over whether
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 trend is more beneficial to society or has adverse effects on nature. In my opinion, the latter notion is more rational.
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 essay will explain the reasons in subsequent paragraphs to support my statement.
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 with the positive side, there are a few advantages of using individual conveyance, like the freedom to move with family and friends more comfortably at our time.
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, we get privacy
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, if everyone starts using their own conveyance, the air will be polluted due to the emission of smoke. It affects adversely the life of living things.
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, the emission of smoke creates severe health issues
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 as breathing difficulties not only for human beings but
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, for animals and plants.
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, the imbalanced death of surrounding living beings.
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, ecology will be disturbed.
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, over usage of own vehicles develop major traffic congestions on roads. To overcome the scenario, the government will be forced to make more roads by cutting down trees.
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 can be the cause of unpredictable climate changes as plants are the main factor that controls the weather.
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, by availing of individual
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, we consume more fuel, which badly affects the global reduction of natural fuel reservoirs. In conclusion, the trend of using private
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 services creates a series of environmental issues (like weather change, death of living creatures and so on.) than personal advantages. So, the solution is to promote public
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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