Who innitially sparked your interest in the field of Technology/STEM?

Born with an innocent mind, my interest in Machinery and STEM (
Science
, Technology, Engineering, and Math) started primitively with my parents, or more specifically, the books that they bought and read for me in my childhood related to Navigation, Universe, Nature... in which books by Stephen Hawking like Universe in a Nutshell or Blackhole attracted me the most. That has raised my curiosity: Why does everything revolve around its particular orbits? When I grew up, I realized that I could find the answer by researching, studying, and performing well in natural subjects at primary, secondary, and high school levels. Though my enthusiasts in
Science
developed significantly when I entered grade 10, during the COVID-19 pandemic, when people had to stay in a closed environment for a long time and face the risk of continuous exposure to CO2 at a low concentration which may harm their health. Me and my partner decided to conduct a research to participate in the National
Science
Fair to find a way to solve the problem. During the time of the project, we had had the chance to meet and study with many professors in the Vietnam Academy of
Science
and Technology with modern facilities available for experiments that form a real passion in me and I want to be like them shortly. And the most revolutionary event that played a decisive role in my dream of having an occupation related to
Science
and Machinery: was when I took part in the one-day International Workshop program named: THE FIRST PRESTIGIOUS CONFERENCE CELEBRATING INTERNATIONAL YEAR OF BASIC SCIENCES FOR SUSTAINABLE DEVELOPMENT 2022, organized by Rencontres du Vietnam in ICISI Center, Binh Dinh Province, Vietnam. There I was able to meet many famous scientists around the World (Professor Duncan Haldane - Nobel Prize in Physics 2016) and hear them discussing their most recent findings. I was deeply impressed by the speech of professor Dam Thanh Son, who was awarded the Dirac Medals in 2018. He encourages us to study, gives out some advice, and provides some new concepts that students can learn and understand based on the Topological Quantum Matters of Professor Haldane. After attending the Conference as an Observer, I realized that with the knowledge I currently own, I have to try a lot to be able to approach a new horizon in knowledge. Just only by actively mastering the knowledge could I have more profound deliberation of the world, wider vision and awareness.
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