Some people think that secondary or high school students should be taught how to use money management as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?
It is believed that providing financial education courses for teenagers in high school is important because it is a vital skill in
the
modern society. I totally agree with Correct article usage
apply
this
statement due to the knowledge how
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of how
money
will help students in adulthood.
First
and foremost, the
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apply
money
management is a
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an
indispensible
part of our life so we face Correct your spelling
indispensable
with
it Change preposition
apply
everyday
.Replace the word
every day
Finacial
education is the combination of several skills and knowledge Correct your spelling
Financial
such
as how to spend money
and save them. Even when you sell or buy something you always should know how much you gave and is
it a good price for a certain product.Correct word choice
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For example
, you are going to buy a new car
and there are plenty of shops which offer you identical
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cars
however
their prices are different because they provide different sales.One of they will give you a Add a comma
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the second
thousands
and 30% after one year. In Change to singular
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for 1 million is more profitable than buying Add an article
a car
the car
for
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one for
thousands
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On the other hand
,there are a lot of people who thinks
that basic knowledge earned from Correct subject-verb agreement
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environment
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are
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money
management course will acquient
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acquaint
student
with basics of economics Fix the agreement mistake
students
such
as how banks work and
etc.
To conclude, teaching Correct word choice
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students
money
management lessons in high or secondary school would benefit in
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students
future life.Change noun form
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