Some people think that secondary or high school students should be taught how to use money management as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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It is believed that providing financial education courses for teenagers in high school is important because it is a vital skill in
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modern society. I totally agree with
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statement due to the knowledge
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to use
money
will help students in adulthood.
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money
management is
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indispensible
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indispensable
part of our life so we face
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it
everyday
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.
Finacial
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education is the combination of several skills and knowledge
such
as how to spend
money
and save them. Even when you sell or buy something you always should know how much you gave and
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it a good price for a certain product.
For example
, you are going to buy a new
car
and there are plenty of shops which offer you
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car
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,
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their prices are different because they provide different sales.One of they will give you a
car
for 1 million , while
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will give you it for 800
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and 30% after one year. In
this
case,buying
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for 1 million is more profitable than buying
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800
thousands
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.
On the other hand
,there are a lot of people who
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that basic knowledge earned from
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without special subjects
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enough.
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, after
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plenty of students use their own
money
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because they don't know how to spend them beneficially.The
money
management course will
acquient
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acquaint
student
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students
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with basics of economics
such
as how banks work
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etc. To conclude, teaching
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students
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for
money
management lessons in high or secondary school would benefit
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students
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future life.
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