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When international media (including movies, fashion shows, advertisements and other TV programs) convey the same messages to the global audience, people argue that the expansion of international media has negative impacts on cultural diversity. What is your opinion?

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Some people think that international movies, TV dramas and global
fashion
 industries make a negative impact on overseas audiences. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I firmly disagree with
this
 statement. Focusing
first
 on the merit of international media programmes, recent movies and TV dramas tend to cherish the
diversity
 of the characters. One good illustration is the Netflix drama series, "Sex Education" produced by a British director.
This
 drama has a lot of LGBTQ high school student characters and describes the
diversity
 of the way of sex. It was already nominated for several worldwide awards and gained massive fans all over the world.
This
 phenomenon definitely empowers young LGBTQ generations who have felt isolation or loneliness.
In addition
, some
fashion
 brand advertisements demonstrate the theory of their
diversity
 by using
variety
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a variety
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 of appearance models.
For instance
, Calvin Klein, a famous
fashion
 brand choose a plus-size model and displayed the biggest panel advertisement in the middle of Manhattan, NY. Another reference is Nike, one of the sports brand, use a model who wears
hijab
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a hijab
the hijab
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. These are the strong message which describes that anybody has a right to wear the clothes they want, or anyone who has typical religion
also
 has a right to join sports. In conclusion, I believe media entertainment
enhance
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enhances
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 the
diversity
 of the way of individual preferences and
fashion
 brands empower people who have plus-size physical or specific religious.
Therefore
, I strongly disagree with the statement above.
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