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Some people think that travelling abroad is necessary while others believe it's not because TV and the Internet can give people the same information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is true that virtual tours have already provided abundant information for
people
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 who are interested in foreign
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. The debate if travelling to foreign places is necessary remains
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. Some
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 insist that visiting foreign countries can not be replaced by online sightseeing. Because foreign customs can barely be imagined if someone never experiences them before, especially in agriculture and cuisines.
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, most churches in China are three to four times smaller than the York Church. Being in front of a real building would bring us astonishing holy feelings, which
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 hardly generate by watching pictures or videos online through a two-dimensional screen.
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, other
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 regard travelling to other countries as an unnecessary choice. Since the websites and media provide lots of details about famous and important views or
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 elsewhere in the world.
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 the flights, hotels or tickets for visiting places are extra burdens for those who have limited money to pay for those things, little free time or only wanna learn about contexts. The online information is sufficient for them to have a spiritual grasp of foreign
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. In conclusion, online services provide virtual ways for
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 to know more about foreign
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. I don't think pictures or video records made by others can overweigh our sights or interactions in the real world. I,
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, regard travelling abroad as vital and can not be replaced by viewing foreign places or watching food videos online even if some background contexts look the same as those in offline visits.
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