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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crimes dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV show are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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These days ,
people
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 are likely to watch crime shows more than other genres and
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 read
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 type of book more .
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 , in
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finally
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 I will talk about my opinion .
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movies
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 and books with a lot of criminality are becoming more popular among
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 .
Firstly
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 ,most of these
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 are eye-catching because there are full of action and mysterious plots
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people
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 want to find the criminal at the end of the movie .
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 ,
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these
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movies
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 should make a topic for
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 to talk
in other words
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 they want to predict the end of the story and are likely to guess the criminal of the story
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 sometimes they talk with their colleagues and friends about the
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 and give their opinion .
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 , some countries want to increase public awareness through real stories of crime which happens in their area , they think it would help them to learn how to protect themselves and
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 what to do in similar situations .
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 , there are many advantages
people
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 give after watching these films but I think it should be useful if parents give some restrictions for their children to watch these
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 because it might cause children are exposing to violence and
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 they will probably become aggressive if they got inspired by some plots . In conclusion ,
people
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 are likely to read crime book and watch
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this movie
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movies
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 because it is mysterious and brings their consciousness but it is really important to think about the causes it has on young millennials.
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