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In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people. What do you think may be the reasons for this? What problems might this cause in society?

#countries #respect #people #society
The graph shows how by 2030 the
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 living in urban areas will increase compared to 2003 in different countries and in the world in general.
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, on the graph, it can be seen that the
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 living in urban areas will grow in 2030 in every part of the planet. American and European countries had more percentages of
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African and Asian countries and in 2030 more people will live in urban areas
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 they did in 2003. At least 10% of people will change their location all over the world. The strongest growth is expected in Africa. The smallest change is predicted in
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North America. According to the forecast shown on the graph, the share of urban residents worldwide will be more than 60% in 2030. The share of the urban
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 in Asia and Africa will be more than 50%, while less than 20% of people in America will live outside the city, preferring life in the metropolis. Slightly less than 80% of Europe's
population
 in 2030 will live in cities
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social structures
  • nuclear families
  • extended family
  • intergenerational respect
  • dual-income households
  • technological advancements
  • perception
  • value shifts
  • vigor
  • innovation
  • increased mobility
  • neglected
  • mental health
  • generational divide
  • misunderstandings
  • stereotypes
  • social fabric
  • healthcare strain
  • inadequate care
  • quality of life
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