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Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What are the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective in reducing crime?

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That young adults are getting involved in crimes tends to become more common in most nations. There are a number of problems that people suffer
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 of these crimes. There are some factors that contribute to youth
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, leading them to dangerous situations, but
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 some ways of solving problems we can take. Perhaps the major element that influences
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young people’s criminal decision-making
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 lack of moral education. Nowadays,
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 Teachers and parents
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teaching them morals.
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 of insufficient moral development, they virtually can not manage their own emotions. Another major problem is linked to
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difficulty of finding jobs.
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 situation would cause young people involved in illegal activities
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 as burglaries, and white-collar. Turning to possible solutions, probably the most effective solution is to improve moral development contents in the curriculum of
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, moral education should be considered to be as crucial as nutrition, health, and academics for students.
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, the government should control the unemployment of youngsters and support job opportunities for them to prevent an increasing rate of crimes.
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, the problem caused is both a person's education and
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 problem , and the solutions should involve coordinated action by
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the government
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