In many countries, paying for things using mobile phones (cellphones) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In every aspect of life nowadays,some
people
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always try to make money.Paying for mobile phone
apps
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is a manifestation of a mindset like
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.I believe the disadvantages outweigh the advantages as even being helpful to the developers, creates a financial division among the
people
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and modern technology becomes inaccessible for some
people
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. On the one hand, hard work and funds are needed to develop sophisticated technology which attracts specialists to get in only if it is advantageous for them as well.If developers do not charge for
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modern
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it would be difficult for them to work in the
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place,
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it may not even motivate them to do so.
For instance
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,Apple charges higher prices for its new features and in turn is able to hire highly-paid experts from all around the world even
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everybody loves Apple and dreams to work there.
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,money motivates
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to develop
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,charging for something as common as mobile
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creates financial classes in society.
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,some
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can afford them while others can not.
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,free music
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are widely used by everyone around the globe while the paid versions are only used by a few.
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,paid mobile applications may categorize society financially.
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,paid
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can not
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by everyone.On a day like
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,when technology is a basic necessity of our society,charging for something as common as mobile
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is just not fair.The accessibility of
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apps
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is reduced.To explain an example, a survey of every major mobile phone
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shows
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much rise in the use of free software comparatively.
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,paid features decrease public access. To reiterate,developers and businessmen benefit from
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paid versions of software.
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,it decreases public use and access.
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,mobile
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should be free for all.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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