Government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets some people think that gov is wasting money and should spend more on addressing the problems of public

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nowadays
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big number of
people
and different organisations like governments
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NASA want to discover new life in other
plants
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planets
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like Mars and spent on
this
research big amount of money.
However
, many
people
do not like
this
idea they think that it is indignantly. On the one hand ,
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is growing significantly every year and now the
nomber
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number
of
people
have
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already reached eight billion. So
government
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the government
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is
concerning
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about
this
fast growth and
want
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wants
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to colonise
new
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a new
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planet to give
people
opportunities to live peacefully.
Secondly
, it is a good idea to set up many factories and plants if it happened , our planet would become less polluted.
In addition
,
in
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on
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other
planets
a lot of natural resources
for instance
different types of iron , different expensive stones like diamonds etc. Well it will be great to mine all
this
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natural resources somewhere , but not
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the
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our planet. By way of
contrast
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we understand that all
what
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I mentioned
it
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is very expensive and complicated to make
it
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in real life.
On the other hand
, try to discover other
planets
while approximately 70
percent
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per cent
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of
people
are poor and 30
percent
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can not afford to eat a general meal.
Instead
of helping
for
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poor
people
, we can not even
to
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defend wild animals from extinction and forests from deforestation. Rather than in our world a lot of places
which
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have not
discovered
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been discovered
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yet.
Fore
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For
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example oceans and rainforests. In conclusion , now it is necessary to spend
big
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a big
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amount of money
for
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on
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the
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apply
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discovering
planets
. It is better to spend all
this
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these
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trillions for
the
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a
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peaceful life
fore
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for
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everyone in
this
world.
As a result
, only after
that
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,that
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we can try to discover
another
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another planet
other planets
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planets
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