Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.
Nowadays the world has become more digitized
,
if in the Remove the comma
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beginning
we were using Add a comma
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computers
mostly for work, today it is an essential item for education
. In this
case
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peoples
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people's
opinion
has divided, some say that it is unhealthy and will cause problems, Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
others
are more optimistic. Even though I believe that using Correct word choice
while others
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a computer
the computer
computer
all day could be harmful, I agree that Fix the agreement mistake
computers
education
should be preparing kids for the real world, where everything is on gadgets.
On the one hand, using computers
for education
, and then
all night watching movies and playing online games is definitely unhealthy behavior
. Using these goods without knowing limits may lead to back pains, eye problems and migraines, which are caused by blue light radiating from the screen. To prevent Change the spelling
behaviour
this
from happening students
should follow special measures, for example
time
schedule for using Correct article usage
a time
computers
, wear
special glasses while working on them and Wrong verb form
wearing
also
do exercises on posture every half hours
.
Despite everything, Change to a singular noun
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computers
are more convenient to study on them, than on
books and paper. It is easier for Change preposition
apply
students
to do research and be able to write on the same thing and send by
email, rather than writing everything. Correct pronoun usage
it by
Also
using paper based
materials is harmful Add a hyphen
paper-based
for
the environment. Thanks to digitalization Change the preposition
to
students
had their
opportunity to continue Change the word
the
education
during the pandemic period. Correct pronoun usage
their education
For example
, softwares
like Zoom, Skype, Correct your spelling
software
MS
Teams became more popular among Correct word choice
and MS
students
and teachers.
In conclusion, computers
are extremely useful when it comes to the education
process,
because they allow Remove the comma
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students
to work faster and self-study. Also
people should not forget that looking at the screen a lot and sitting not right can cause many health problems, so they should do preventive activities.Add a comma
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