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Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #education #hunger #food #aid
There is an opinion that
education
 is the main instrument to
fight
hunger
 globally. But
also
existence
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 of other
thought
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 should be mentioned,
in
particular
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 that
the
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apply
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worldwide
hunger
 will be defeated only with
such
 a tool as
food
 aid. I concur
with
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that
hunger
 will
be significantly reduce
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 only with the use of knowledge powers. In
this
 very
essay
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it
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I
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 will be shown why I support that by
the
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considering both sides. It may look convincing that
food
 aid is
the
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 very powerful instrument to
fight
with
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world
hunger
. But it’s only appearance
,
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 because
food
 help aimed to support hungry people in specific territories, so it’s very narrow.
Moreover
,
food
 aid is a very temporary and costly measure.
For instance
,
UN
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food
 program delivered to central Africa thousands of tons of
food
 in one month which cost millions of dollars and it didn’t cover the whole central
Africans
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territories
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.
In
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 the other hand, it would be good to look into
education
 as a measure to reduce
hunger
 worldwide. It should be noticed that
education
 gives intellectual tools to humanity which help them to survive. To illustrate,
history
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 of disease showed that any disease was beaten only with
efforts
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 of scientists and other people with distinguished intellect. So the same approach would be appropriate to
fight
with
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worldwide
hunger
. So
this
 is the main point to support
development
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 and extension of
education
. In
conclusion
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 it is important to mention that both of the shown
hunger
 fighting tools are important, but
still
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 if we talk about
institutional
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the institutional
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 and complex
fight
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fights
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with
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against
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hunger
 it is better to use
education
 as an instrument.
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