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PEOPLE WHO GO TO LIVE OTHER COUNTRIES, SHOULD FOLLOW THE CUSTOMS AND TRADITIONAL OF THE NEW COUNTRY. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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 that nowadays, it becomes a trend that most
people
 go overseas for different purposes like for earning, for education etc.
however
, some individuals reflect that
people
 should follow the customs and
traditions
 of that particular
country
 where they go to live. I wholeheartedly agree with the above statement. In
this
 essay, I will give some reasons to support my opinion and
also
 give my opinion in the conclusion.
To begin
 with, it would be beneficial for the
people
 if they follow the duties and
traditions
 of the
country
 where they want to live because by following their
rituals
 they can enhance their knowledge about that
country
’s culture which would be helpful for them to survive easily.
Secondly
, by following the customs and
traditions
 of other countries,
people
 can know about the climate condition. Which can help them to live peacefully.
For instance
, when Indian
people
 migrate to European countries,
then
 the weather in that
country
 is very cold
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compared to India. So, they have to be learned to survive there.
On the other hand
, it is happening that when
people
 migrate to another
country
,
then
 they ignore the
rituals
 of their belonging
country
.
As a result
, by forgetting their
traditions
 and
rituals
, they forget the value of their native
country
. Agglomerating all the points elaborated, I would like to conclude that it is beneficial to accept the customs and
tradition
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 of other countries, but they do not forget the
rituals
 and
traditions
 of their native
country
.
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