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PEOPLE WHO GO TO LIVE OTHER COUNTRIES, SHOULD FOLLOW THE CUSTOMS AND TRADITIONAL OF THE NEW COUNTRY. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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 that nowadays, it becomes a trend that most
people
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 go overseas for different purposes like for earning, for education etc.
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, some individuals reflect that
people
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 should follow the customs and
traditions
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 of that particular
country
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 where they go to live. I wholeheartedly agree with the above statement. In
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 give my opinion in the conclusion.
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 with, it would be beneficial for the
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 if they follow the duties and
traditions
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 of the
country
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 where they want to live because by following their
rituals
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 they can enhance their knowledge about that
country
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’s culture which would be helpful for them to survive easily.
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, by following the customs and
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 of other countries,
people
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 can know about the climate condition. Which can help them to live peacefully.
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, when Indian
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 migrate to European countries,
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 the weather in that
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 is very cold
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compared to India. So, they have to be learned to survive there.
On the other hand
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, it is happening that when
people
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 migrate to another
country
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,
then
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 they ignore the
rituals
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 of their belonging
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.
As a result
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, by forgetting their
traditions
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 and
rituals
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, they forget the value of their native
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. Agglomerating all the points elaborated, I would like to conclude that it is beneficial to accept the customs and
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 of other countries, but they do not forget the
rituals
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 and
traditions
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 of their native
country
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.

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