PEOPLE WHO GO TO LIVE OTHER COUNTRIES SHOULD FOLLOW THE CUSTOMS AND TRADITIONAL OF THE NEW COUNTRY. AGREE OR DISAGREE.

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It is an undeniable fact that fashion and customs have changed compared to the past time. Nowadays,

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different communities of

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migrating to other developed countries and I personally believe that

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have to respect and follow, the traditional and recreational activities of the new nation. The

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and foremost crucial reason, which supports my opinion is the importance of culture. In

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modern era, there are numerous inhabitants, who moved to India and they respect the

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culture and enjoy different festivals.

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, foreigners celebrate different

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festivals

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as Navratri, and Diwali even on these events foreigners love to wear

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traditional clothes and follow the entire process of the tradition.

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learn about a new culture,

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, they improve their knowledge about the tradition as well as get knowledge about different customs outfits.

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, there are some drawbacks

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, when other communities move into a new nation, some of them do not follow the rules and process of the legacies, and due to

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different kinds of issues are created by these new ones.

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, recently, Americans make fun of the crucial

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tradition, which is Karva-Chauth. Americans did not follow the entire process of

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, on social media Indians tweeted about them and after some time

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of Florida passed apologies to the Indians. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I strongly believe that everyone has to respect the different nations traditions as well as have to follow their customs, whenever move in a new nation.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

262 words

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PEOPLE WHO GO TO LIVE OTHER COUNTRIES SHOULD FOLLOW THE CUSTOMS AND TRADITIONAL OF THE NEW COUNTRY. AGREE OR DISAGREE.

Include an introduction and conclusion

to what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say that it is possible for a county to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

“Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”