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Crime rate nowadays is decreasing as to compared to past because of technology advancement. Do yo agree or disagree?

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with the improvement of
technology
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, the rate of criminal activities is declining in comparison to the past. I agree with
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 statement to some extent.
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 with, everything in life has its own boons and banes. Human beings have made many unfathomable things possible
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, recent developments in
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 have allowed us to make video calls, cashless payments, etc.
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, it has helped to investigate many
crimes
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 and has made it easy to solve many cases that used to take years to solve
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 as the installation of cameras, microphones, and hidden cameras.
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, earlier the records of every civilian were manually written but now as
technology
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 progressed we can save the records on the computer. And takes a click to get the information or previous history of any criminal.
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, it has
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 opened many ways for criminals to commit
crimes
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 with access to
technology
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. The rates of cyber
crimes
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 have increased tremendously as
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 progressed.
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, the usage of many devices like hidden cameras which are used to record or make illegal videos of people have
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 been possible due to
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. To sum up, it can be reiterated that the development of
technology
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 has proven to be a great tool in solving many cases and reducing crime rates but it has
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 given a chance to criminals to commit
crimes
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 in elusive ways.
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