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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is considered by some that the majority of students should choose their studies by their interests, while others claim that it is better to study only the relevant subjects of the
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 science and
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. While I agree with the
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, since technology runs the world now, it is important to be aware of
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 needs and fit the abilities into them in case to secure upcoming career opportunities.
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, in practice students of
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 computer science to learn how to digitize and adapt the knowledge to prospective
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 reality.
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, forcing people to learn a certain subject is quite detrimental. There are a lot of examples from my friends' experiences
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 when they quitted studies or did not work even a day
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 their profession.
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 it happened because they were forced by their parents to study Economics or IT, as a profession of the
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, but at the end of the
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 they were simply wasting their time and resources on something they were not passionate about. In conclusion, I believe it is important to be adaptable to realities and study additional subjects that could be useful for
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 career. But, it is more crucial to choose something you are good at and passionate about, rather than wasting years of studying just to fit into upcoming standards.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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