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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
It is argued that
,
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 in recent days we have
lot
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 of
options
. I fully agree with the statement. It is true that we have so many alternatives in our regular life.
Thus
, I believe these
options
 are making our lives a bit complex. These days, we have so many
options
 in our
every day
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 meals. Not only that, if we want to buy any sort of
things
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, we get confused due to
major
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area
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 of alternatives. Recently, we have
to
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 face different
types
 of alternatives even
in
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 our dining table. Whenever we sit for
having
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meals, we get
atleast
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at least
 2/3
types
 of extra
options
 in cooking items. Not necessarily it is possible to cook
every one's
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 favourite dishes at a time.
As a result
, we get to taste
to
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too
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 many
options
.
For instance
, whenever we go to a restaurant, we order different
types
 of
foods
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 due to
variety
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 of
options
.
Thus
, we have to leave the restaurant with leftovers.
In addition
,
whenevr
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whenever
 we go for shopping or try to buy anything, we get confused as there are tons of variety of
options
. If we simply want to buy a dress, we end up buying
with
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 other
staffs
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 as well. If we want to buy a pair of leather
shoe
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, we
also
 buy a leather bag along with the shoe.
For example
, we decide to buy a Samsung cell
phone
. Whenever we go to the mall, we find another branded cell
phone
 within the same price range. Due to the availability, we end up buying simply different branded cell
phone
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 or
buy
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buying
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 another extra one
instead
 of one
phone
. In closing, as different
types
 of
options
making
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make
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 our lives easier, it is creating complexity in other ways
also
. Alternative
options
 are good for daily life.
However
, too many
options
 are unnecessary for
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the individual
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individual
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individuals
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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