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Many people think that zoos are not good enough for animals and they should be improved or animals must go to natural life. What is your opinion?

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Many people believe that
zoos
 are not good for
animals
 so they need to find a better way to do it or return
animals
 to the wild. Most people think of
zoos
 as places of entertainment and just to see
animals
 but they do not think about why they keep
animals
 in capacity or whether they are in good or bad condition. But in my opinion,
animals
 are not given enough attention in
zoos
 they just charge money to enter
zoos
 they do not use them for
animals
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for example
 we often go to
the
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zoos
 with our family and I like one elephant there very much I always brought him a lot of fruits.When we went a few days ago I was very sad because there was not here which I love. The owners of the zoo said that they could not find enough food for the elephant and did not take good care of it. It fell ill so it was sent to Tashkent zoo after
this
 incident I was condensed that the
animals
 were not well taken care of .
On the other
hand
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 everyone approves of freedom and in my opinion,
animals
also
 need freedom,
for example
, if we compare free
animals
 with
animals
 in
zoos
 free
animals
 are much stronger and eat their own food. In conclusion,
zoos
 should be abolished and
animals
 should be given freedom because
animals
 in
zoos
 can lose their abilities and even get sick or die from starvation
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