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“For his mastery of historical and biographical description as well as for brilliant oratory in defending exalted human values. ” In 1953, these words were honored to one of the greatest
people
 in the history --
Winston
Churchill
,who gained the Nobel Prize in literature by his marvellous words and speeches. As a prolific writer, he was
also
 the only Prime
Minister
 who had won
this
 Prize.And his book 《Never ever give up》has sold an aggregate of millions. In 2002, in a survey about “100 greatest
British
people
 in history”,
Winston
Churchill
 was listed 1st. These indicate that
people
 are fascinated and admired by his personality and his focused will and spirits. His
courage
 inside his soul,
wisdom
 upheld in his head, and his resolution stored up in his mind, tremendously inspired both the
British
 during
WWII
 and
people
 around the world nowadays. As the Prime
Minister
 of UK during
WWII
,
Winston
Churchill
 led his country to
fight
 against the Nazi empire by showing all his
courage
 and might. In 1940, the German army forced French to
surrender
. At that time,
British
 lost lots of material and men in Dunkirk, and many other countries has fallen into Nazi’s ruled. Many
people
 believed that
British
 couldn’t be the rival of Germany and wanted to
surrender
 too. But at
this
 urgent moment,
Winston
 stood up and declared that: We shall never
surrender
! He gave the commons a thrilling speeches which handed down from generation to generation. “We shall go on to the end. We shall
fight
 in France, we shall 
fight
 on the seas and oceans......We shall never
surrender
!” Using parallelism,
British
people
’s confidence against Germany was motivated by his
courage
. During the air
fight
 in England,
Churchill
 inspected the cities and pilots everyday, regardless of German’s horrible bombing. His
courage
 that dared to
fight
 gave the
British
 dare to win. Struggling, addressing, and
finally
, winning.
Courage
 inside him made allies strove for the victory in
WWII
. As
Winston
 said, “Success is not final, failure is not fatal: it is the
courage
 to continue that counts.” It is
courage
 that brings
British
 to victory. And when it comes to challenging the difficulties,
Winston
’s
wisdom
 counts a lot in his glorious life.
Winston
Churchill
 was
also
 praised by his
wisdom
 in politics and in motivating
people
. During
WWII
,
Winston
 united USA and Soviet Union to establish a joint effort opposing Nazis. He
also
 gave so many encouraging speeches with outstanding literature technique that many
British
people
 regarded him as the mainstay of their soul. What’s more,
Winston
 was willing to accept
people
’s comments. Just as he said:“
Courage
 is what it takes to stand up and speak;
courage
 is
also
 what it takes to sit down and listen.” In 1945,
Winston
 failed in being the
next
 Prime
Minister
 in
British
. Many
people
 asked him sardonically that how did he felt. But he said that what he did during war was just to defend
British
people
’s right.His
wisdom
 was praised by the former Prime
Minister
 Boris Johnson. His
wisdom
 in politics made
British
people
 acclaimed and deeply moved by his magnanimity.
Moreover
,
Winston
’s resolution acted an essential role in encountering obstacle.
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