Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Showing
information
is
actual
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issue in our world where it has
strong
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influence on
people
. There are various spheres of our life where
information
is more or less important for
people
working there
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this
. For
this
reason
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some
people
consider that it is good to
share
information
while others think in
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the opposite
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way.
For example
, practically all scientists are glad to
share
information
with ordinary
people
or other scientists. There is no competition in the sphere. Sometimes it is bad for
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the government
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which
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scientists
share
the
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secret
information
with international
spy
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but it will not hurt
information
. There are some simple rules in
academic
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the academic
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world which
limite
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limit
informational sources between
people
. If
person
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a person
the person
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is interested in theme
discussing
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with you and you are ready to keep talking
then
the person gives you all
information
what
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he knows for free.
On the other hand
, if the person knows much and he knows that you can not give him actual or new
information
then
he will
share
information
with you just for money.
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,
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a student
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student
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students
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pay for
his
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their
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learning while two students can cooperate and
share
information
with each other. It is
obviously
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that sharing
information
in
business
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the business
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world can
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followes
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followed
follow
by releases. There is large competition and it may
takes
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much
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costs for companies. Companies
loose
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lose
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their profit every day because
some one
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someone
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can not keep
silence
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especially
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IT companies. To sum up
all
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about
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it is necessary to say that there are some spheres in which sharing
information
is a crime. In my opinion, in many
cases
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information
can be too important or
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at all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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