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Band 6.5

The air-conditioner in your flat broke three weeks aago anf it is the middle of summer. You asked the landlord to repair it and he promised to send someone but no-one has contacted you yet. Write a letter to the landlord complaining about the situation. In your letter: explain the problem, remind the landlord about his promise, say what you want him to do.

Dear Mr Akbar, I
am
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 your tenant for 2 years,living in your flat no 227 of silk executive. I am writing
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 letter to bring your kind attention towards the pledge you made
last
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 week about repairing the cooling system of my apartment. Two weeks ago, my parents visited me to celebrate my birthday, and they were supposed to stay 2 nights at my place.
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, unfortunately, their first night went ridiculous
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 a sudden fault in the air-conditioner.
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, they had to leave
early
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 than the already planned schedule.
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, our family gathering was spoiled. The next morning I informed you immediately about the problem and you promised to send an electrician. It has been 2 weeks since we
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 going through hard warm nights with insufficient sleep which is affecting our daily routines. I was wondering if you could pay attention to
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 matter on a priority basis and ought to send the concerned person. Your prompt response will be awaited. Yours faithfully, Sana Ghani

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to use clear paragraphs for each point: the problem, the reminder, and what you want.
Task Achievement
Try to add a bit more detail about how the heat has affected your life.
Tone
Consider rephrasing 'ridiculous' to something more diplomatic, like 'unpleasant'.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have a clear greeting and closing, which is great for the letter format.
Task Achievement
You have explained the problem well and reminded the landlord of his promise.
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