In many cities around the world pollution levels have risen in recent years. Why are some cities becoming more polluted? What effects does this have? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Lot
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A lot
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of regions in the world get higher
pollution
levels in the current years. The
causing
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causes
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of
pollution
that
has
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have
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increased in many
of
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apply
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cities
in
this
world could be too many
vehicles
and
lack
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a lack
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of green public
areas
. Those
of
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apply
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problems give bad impacts on health and
environment
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the environment
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. There are many more
vehicles
in
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on
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the road because people tend to be using private
car
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cars
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or motorcycles rather than using public transportation. Because of
this
too many
vehicles
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,vehicles
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it
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apply
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will
generates
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generate
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more polluted particles
to
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in
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the
air
. The more
vehicles
will be the more
contaminations
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contamination
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. The other aspect
of
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apply
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causing
this
is
lack
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the lack
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of green public
areas
. There are just some plants
exist
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that exist
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in the
cities
. Many
of
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areas
were
builded
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built
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for
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a skyscraper
the skyscraper
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skyscraper
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skyscrapers
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. Just
few
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a few
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of
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buildings
using
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use
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vertical
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the vertical
a vertical
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garden
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gardens
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to give more green
areas
.
The green
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Green
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public
areas
can contribute
of
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to
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fresh
air
by their ability for processing Carbon
Dioxyde
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dioxide
. Pollutions give bad impacts
especially
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,especially
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for
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on
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human’s
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human
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health.
Like
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Air
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air
pollution
with xenobiotic particles in the
air
is very dangerous for
lungs
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the lungs
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. It is can get into
human’s
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human
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lungs because it is a small particle mixed with the
air
when humans breathe. The other effect could be worse
to
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on
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the human’s
dingestion
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digestion
digestive
system because of water
pollution
. If there is water
pollution
everywhere it will
much
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be much
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more
ptahogen
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pathogen
pathogenic
pathogens
that
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than
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duplicate. One
of
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apply
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the illness
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illness
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illnesses
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that can happen because of water
pollution
is Cholera.
Environment
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The environment
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also
can be not good due to
the
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apply
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air
pollution
. It will
can
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apply
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make
ozone
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the ozone
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layer thinner and increase the global heat waves
then
causing
the
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apply
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climate change. In conclusion, the
rises
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rise
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of
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in
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pollution
that happen in many
cities
because of the number of
vehicles
out of limit and the public green
areas
in the
cities
has
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have
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decreased
time
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from time
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to time. It is
therefore
worse
situation
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situations
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can happen
such
as the illness spread
in
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to
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human
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humans
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and the quality of
environment
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the environment
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will be bad.
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