In many cities around the world pollution levels have risen in recent years. Why are some cities becoming more polluted? What effects does this have? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Lot
of regions in the world get higher Change the article
A lot
pollution
levels in the current years. The causing
of Replace the word
causes
pollution
that has
increased in many Correct subject-verb agreement
have
of
Change preposition
apply
cities
in this
world could be too many vehicles
and lack
of green public Correct article usage
a lack
areas
. Those of
problems give bad impacts on health and Change preposition
apply
environment
.
There are many more Correct article usage
the environment
vehicles
in
the road because people tend to be using private Change preposition
on
car
or motorcycles rather than using public transportation. Because of Fix the agreement mistake
cars
this
too many vehicles
Add a comma
,vehicles
it
will Correct pronoun usage
apply
generates
more polluted particles Change the verb form
generate
to
the Change preposition
in
air
. The more vehicles
will be the more contaminations
. The other aspect Fix the agreement mistake
contamination
of
causing Change preposition
apply
this
is lack
of green public Correct article usage
the lack
areas
. There are just some plants exist
in the Correct pronoun usage
that exist
cities
. Many of
Change preposition
apply
areas
were builded
for Correct your spelling
built
Add an article
a skyscraper
the skyscraper
skyscraper
. Just Fix the agreement mistake
skyscrapers
few
Change the article
a few
of
buildings Change preposition
apply
using
Wrong verb form
use
vertical
Add an article
the vertical
a vertical
garden
to give more green Fix the agreement mistake
gardens
areas
. The green
public Correct article usage
Green
areas
can contribute of
fresh Change preposition
to
air
by their ability for processing Carbon Dioxyde
.
Pollutions give bad impacts Correct your spelling
dioxide
especially
Add the comma(s)
,especially
for
Change preposition
on
human’s
health. Change noun form
human
Like
Change preposition
Air
air
pollution
with xenobiotic particles in the air
is very dangerous for lungs
. It is can get into Correct article usage
the lungs
human’s
lungs because it is a small particle mixed with the Change noun form
human
air
when humans breathe. The other effect could be worse to
the human’s Change preposition
on
dingestion
system because of water Correct your spelling
digestion
digestive
pollution
. If there is water pollution
everywhere it will much
more Add a missing verb
be much
ptahogen
Correct your spelling
pathogen
pathogenic
pathogens
that
duplicate. One Correct word choice
than
of
Change preposition
apply
Correct article usage
the illness
illness
that can happen because of water Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
pollution
is Cholera. Environment
Add an article
The environment
also
can be not good due to the
Correct article usage
apply
air
pollution
. It will can
make Remove a modal verb
apply
ozone
layer thinner and increase the global heat waves Correct article usage
the ozone
then
causing the
climate change.
In conclusion, the Correct article usage
apply
rises
Fix the agreement mistake
rise
of
Change preposition
in
pollution
that happen in many cities
because of the number of vehicles
out of limit and the public green areas
in the cities
has
decreased Change the verb form
have
time
to time. It is Change preposition
from time
therefore
worse situation
can happen Fix the agreement mistake
situations
such
as the illness spread in
Change preposition
to
human
and the quality of Fix the agreement mistake
humans
environment
will be bad.Correct article usage
the environment
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