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Some people think that PUBG should not be allowed to students. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #pubg #students
Now a days
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, Many
of
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the
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teenagers are
passionaite
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passionate
 about
the
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apply
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PUBS
 in city life culture.There is a belief in parents that children should not
allowed
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be allowed
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 to
PUBS
 when they are
in
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at
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 young age.
Although
 Allowing youth
in to
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into
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PUBS
 and
thus
 mix and know the different cultural backgrounds.I would argue that
this
 is correct to
do
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not allow
the
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students
in to
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into
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PUBS
.
Firstly
, In Major developed cities, different People visit the
PUBS
 after their working hours or completion of business hours, and
also
 these people are above
the
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teenagers and most
for
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of
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 them are working or business persons.
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A Majortity
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Majortity
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Majority
 of them are financially good and able to spend money
in
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on
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PUBS
 and may be addicted to drugs and some bad habits. There are some
siginificant
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significant
 reasons
how
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why
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students
 get impacted due
this
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to this
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 pub culture.
Main
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The main
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 reason is that
students
 get
adopted
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adapted
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 to bad
culture
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cultures
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 like Smoking,
drugs
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drug
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addcition
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addiction
addition
 and consumption of Drinks.
In addition
 to
this
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,this
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 some Pub Management is allowing human
traficking
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trafficking
 in which
students
 are easily
effected
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affected
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to
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by
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 these kinds of Bad cultural. Most of the
students
 come from rural areas to urban areas for education
purpose
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purposes
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 and they have plenty of time after
thier
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their
 classes. because of
this
lesuire
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leisure
time
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,time
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students
 may get
habit
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the habit
a habit
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 to visit
PUBS
. In conclusion, People are thinking that
Students
 should not visit the
PUBs
 while they are in
education
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the education
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 process .I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that
students
 should go to
library
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the library
a library
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 or
some
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do some
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 physical activities which will improve the
metal
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mental
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 and physical fitness
instead
 of going to
pubs
.
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