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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives
Different
personalities
 of people are with various capabilities when facing risks both in
professional
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 and personal lives.
This
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evalute
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evaluate
 the weight of the pros and cons of taking
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a risk
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risk
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 and I would like to give my opinion as well. When considering the
risk taking
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 capacity, the main categories can be highlighted as
risk
 lovers,
risk
 takers,
risk
 neutral and
risk
 averse. Folks who
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with
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risk
 lovers and
risk takers
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personalities
 are willing to accept
risk
 in an enthusiastic way and use
risk
 for the betterment of their lives. Those
personalities
 take
risk
 as challengers which create a motivational environment to achieve the targets at the office as well as the home. Since
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childhood
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 everyone has to surpass the different stages in life and each and every stage consist
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 various hazard that should
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in
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 proportionate levels. These milestones build self-satisfaction and courage to move forward towards the
next
 step of the path.
However
, some categories namely
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risk
neural
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neutral
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 and
risk averse
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 are not in to accept
risk
.
Although
 we have to accept
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a considerable
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 level of
challengers
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challenges
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 when achieving the targets,
risk
 could
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 a stressful environment
to
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for
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 these types of
personalities
 which
lead
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 to
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 up in the trap of depression and anxiety. Mental health is a priority in both professional and personal life. In conclusion, even though
few
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 drawbacks are there when accepting
risk
,
benefits
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the benefits
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 outweigh the disadvantages which
lead
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leads
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 to emphasising the fact that, it is essential to face hazards in life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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