It is often said that to become a successful business a tertiary education is not at all necessary. To what extent you agree or disagree. Give your opinion.

I don't think so because, if the education will be bad, in my mind business will be not as successful as with good education, so in
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the owner of Microsoft Office didn't finish their education because he was smart,
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he went from university. So there are many unknown companies, so they have a good owner, but they've only started so their employees are not as hardworking as Ilon Masks company (SpaceX), so
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you should decide enough money for business it's not 1000$, it must be much more than 1000$, for ,example 10 000$ or more.
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, you should give more money to your workers. They'll be more motivated than employees with low salaries, so you should give more salary than your concurates.
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, you should have a good study, and give more money to your employees.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • essential
  • valuable
  • knowledge
  • skills
  • entrepreneurial
  • practical experience
  • success
  • tertiary education
  • networking opportunities
  • access to resources
  • combination
  • ideal
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