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Ordinary people try to copy famous people either magazine or watching tv.why do they do this?do you think its a good idea to copy famous people?

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people
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people
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renowned
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persons
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 who are the most liked
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 due to an ordinary person admires
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the beloved personage
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that is
 why he copies other
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' characters or
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 of
style
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is a good idea for normal
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 copy to their ideal hero.
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the
 following reasons.
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copy
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 renowned
persons
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' personalities.
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, ordinary
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 admire
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the
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famous
people
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's personal quality is apart from that their professional
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lives
such
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 as charity
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, education help and medical aid. These kinds of good news are released by
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magazines and TV shows in order for
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them to
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 they can easily admire to their ideal
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persons'
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qualitity
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qualities
.
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, luminary
are
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 the introducing to the new
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 among the society in order for
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normal
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 like to watch their
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 of
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style
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 and
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hairstyle
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style
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 to follows.
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,
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Hollywood one of the top ten
heros
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heroes
who
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 Ajith Kumar has introduced a new
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hairstyle
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style
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 like "salt and pepper"
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numerous
 folks nowadays
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.
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Furthermore
,
this
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 of trend is
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normal
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to
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their admire
persons
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' qualities because many
personage
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 are doing
good
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thing
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to
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society and they financially help
to
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others.
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For
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 instance, the Sri Lankan top cricket player
who
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 Muthaiya Muralitharan has
startted
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started
 a charity for cancer
patient
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patients
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 in order for
to
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 many Sri Lankans
are
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 used not only he helps his
country
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people
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 but
also
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 he helps to
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worldwide
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,
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, nowadays numerous Sri Lankans
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 who are loved most Muralitharan they do help to others and take a role model to him.
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, that trend is good. To conclude,
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superstars
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always
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 on
air
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the air
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 among the
people
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 so, we can easily admire and follow their
perssonal
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personal
 lives, characters,
way
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 of styles and helping
tendency
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. I think
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famous folks.

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