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In future robots may do more work that is done by humans today. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

#future #robots #work #humans #outweigh
Technologies are
foundation
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 of
modern
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 era.
However
, in
future
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robots
 are overlapping
by
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human's
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human
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work
. As every garden has its own weeds
similarly
this
 situation is both advantages and disadvantages.
This
 essay will highlight both
the
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aspects. To commence with the views of pros. There are several benefits of computers. One of the major plus
point
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points
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 of
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the machine
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machine
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machines
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 is
time saving
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. To
further
the
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explain it,
robots
 require very less time to complete
work
 as compared to living beings.
For example
,
calculator
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the calculator
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 can calculate a thousand
of
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number
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numbers
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 in just a
second
 whereas,
human
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humans
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 do not solve easily the calculation of a hundred number.
Moreover
, another benefit of machinery is
very
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 low cost to purchase.
on the other hand
, it is very costly to hire a
survent
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survey
servant
 for
work
.
For
instance
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 in
multinational
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the multinational
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industries
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industry
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,industry
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 most of the
work
 is done by
robots
 and
have
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 very low maintenance of
automations
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automation
. Do not
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required
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 to pay salary
on
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every month. So
that
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, it
also
 saves money. Shifting towards the views of cons. There are some darker views of machines.
To begin
 with
robots
 people become
more lazy
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lazier
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 after the development of modern technology
such
 as people
use
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using
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 personal
vehicle
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vehicles
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short
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as short
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destination
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destinations
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. No one like to walk.
As a result
, people have more health problems. For epitome,
sarve
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serve
save
 Boss conducted by the World health organisation it was found that about eighty
percent
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diseases
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of diseases
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 were increased in
last
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the last
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 50
year
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years
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 due to
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increase
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 number of
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the machine
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machine
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machines
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.
In addition
to
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, gadgets do not have common sense and many words which require
a basic knowledge
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basic knowledge
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.
For instance
, China has installed
robots
 in their army
place
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 of Soldiers.yet, it does not jerk properly. To conclude, there are both merits and demerits.
Although
, I believe that
automations
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automation
 are more
advantages
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advantageous
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 because it saves a lot of time and
also
require
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 very low maintenance in comparison with humankind.
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