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In future robots may do more work that is done by humans today. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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Technologies are the foundation of the modern era.
However
 , in the future ,
robots
 are overlapping with human
work
. As every garden has its own weeds
similarly
this
 situation is both advantages and disadvantages.
This
 essay will highlight both
the
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aspects. To commence with the views of pros. There are several benefits of computers. One of the major plus points of machines is time-saving. To
further
 explain ,
robots
 require very less time to complete
work
 as compared to living beings.
For example
, the calculator can calculate a thousand numbers in just a
second
 whereas, humans do not solve easily the calculation of a hundred numbers.
Moreover
, another benefit of machinery is the very low cost to purchase.
on the other hand
, it is very costly to hire a servant for
work
.
For instance
, in multinational
industries
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 most of the
work
 is done by
robots
 and
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 very low maintenance of automation. Do not require to pay salary every month. So it
also
 saves money. Shifting towards the views of cons. There are some darker views of machines.
To begin
 with,due to
robots
 people become lazier after the development of modern technology
such
 as people using personal vehicles as short destinations. No one like to walk.
As a result
, people have more health problems. For epitome, in a survey conducted by the World health organisation , it was found that about eighty per cent of diseases increased in the
last
 50 years due to the increased number of machines. To conclude, there are both merits and demerits.
Although
, I believe that automation is more advantageous because it saves a lot of time and
also
 requires very low maintenance in comparison with humankind.
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