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The pie charts give information about the
water
 used for residential,
industry
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industrial
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 and agricultural purposes in
San
Diego
,
California
 and the world as a whole. Overall, the main purpose for using
water
 in
San
Diego
 county and
California
 is for domestic tasks while other places in the world chiefly use
water
 for farming. The
water
 consumption of
California
 for the industry is slightly higher than other places in the world. In detail, the amount of
water
 used in households in
San
Diego
 is highest, at 60%, followed by that in
California
, at 39%. The
water
 usage of other places around the globe accounts for the lowest figure, at only 8%.
However
, the
water
 consumption of other countries for agricultural activities is significantly higher than the other two countries, at 69% while the amounts of
water
 used in
San
Diego
 and
California
 for the same purpose are 17%, and 28% respectively. Regarding industry, the amount of
water
 consumed by people in
California
 for industrial activities is
highest
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the highest
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, at 33% while the figures for
San
Diego
 and other nations share the same statistic, at 23%.
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