There is an increasing amount of advertising directed at children, which encourages them to buy goods such as toys and snacks. Many parents are that these advertisements put so much pressure on children, while some advertisers claim that they provide useful information to children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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are the most influential factor in people's life due to advances in technology.
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everywhere on TV , Websites and so on. Some people harbour a belief that
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companies are majorly targeted
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children
which directly puts pressure on
children
, while other people are opposed to
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notion. In
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thus
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reasons to agree with the meritorious side.
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First
and Foremost is that most
of
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advertisement
products provide false
information
and target
children
to buy the
product
.
Children
tempt
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the advertisement
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advertisements
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and putting enormous pressure on
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the parent
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parent
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parents
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.
As a result
, parents brought
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unneccessary
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unnecessary
things
such
as toys,
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snacks
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and so on for the
children
to satisfy their happiness and causes issues to the
children
's health. From an environmental perspective,
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number of the
product
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to
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a lot
lot
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.
Hence
, it's apparent why many are against
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this
thread.
On the other hand
, some advertisers concur that they provide useful
information
to
children
by considering several facts.
For instance
, advertising makes aware to
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children
about
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product
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products
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in the market.
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Furthermore
, advertising makes
children
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endless variety of free
information
about different
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products
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and learn about
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, all the points stand in
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good stead. In conclusion, government take severe action
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those companies whose
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the false
information
to adverse the
product
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put
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limitations
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to
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unhealthy
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product
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products
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. Parents
also
take some
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responsibility
and advise the
children
impact of buying
unneccessary
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unnecessary
and unhealthy
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products
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.
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