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The development of tourism contributed to
English
 becoming the most prominent
language
 in the
world
. Some
people
 think
this
 will lead to
English
 becoming the only
language
 to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and
disadvamtages
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disadvantages
to
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 having one
language
 in the
world
.
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 In our modern life,
people
 travel often, which is the reason for the rapid development of the
English
language
. According to large groups,
this
 will increase the popularity of the
English
language
 and bring more
people
 around the
world
 to speak
English
. In
this
 essay, I will explain the pros and cons of being monolingual. On the one hand, it has many advantages if the society speaks only
English
.
Firstly
, speaking the same
language
 allows for easy communication between the two
countries
.
In other words
, they can effectively communicate with other
people
, which leads to the exchange of knowledge and ideas.
Secondly
, it will cause the economy to grow, which will make society flourish.
On the other hand
, as
English
 speaking develops, mother tongue learning decreases. Parents do not teach their children their mother tongue. But
people
 learn
English
 for better life and work.
Additionally
, tourism will be greatly affected by
this
 as there will be no point in visiting other
countries
 , where visitors will find the same culture which is being followed by their natives. As an example, we can take foreign
countries
 as an example, in recent years there has been a decline in beaches in foreign
countries
. There,
insabs
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cabs
 are learning the languages of other
countries
, forgetting their own languages. In conclusion, having a common
language
 makes communication easier and leads to community development.If more
people
 around the
world
 could converse in
English
, it would encourage communication around the
world
 and bring many benefits.
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