More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a morden life style which can not be treated with morden medicines. Some people think that a return to a traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extend to you agree?
In our time most people are suffering from health problems
that
is
caused by our modern Change the verb form
are
life style
which can not be treated with today's medicines. I believe that in that Correct your spelling
lifestyle
case
we should return to Add a comma
,case
a
traditional medicine.
Remove the article
apply
To begin
with
our modern Add a comma
,with
life style
is the cause of our health issues Correct your spelling
lifestyle
Correct word choice
and what
what
we should handle in our modern Correct word choice
that
life
. For instance
, in our everyday schedule
we have coffee more than water which can be Add a comma
,schedule
health
problem after getting old or even earlier. Correct article usage
a health
Moreover
, fastfood
Correct your spelling
fast food
which
changed our healthy lifestyle after its invention and made people disable to cook.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
An
other words, people getting lazier than Correct your spelling
In
never
before due to outdoor foods. Correct your spelling
ever
This
could be changed if we start cooking our own meal instead
of buying it. For example
, if we start to consume healthy food with fresh
Add an article
the fresh
a fresh
product
it can change our lives Fix the agreement mistake
products
to
Change preposition
for
the
better future and live without Correct article usage
a
hart
disease and Correct your spelling
heart
outweighting
.
In conclusion, I believe that we still have a chance to handle Correct your spelling
outweighing
this
problem without modern medicine and take responsibility to change our modern life style
.Correct your spelling
lifestyle
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