IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is positive or negative situation?

#countries #home #be #case #situation
In
this
 modern era, squabbling
on
Change preposition
over
show examples
increased
Correct article usage
an increased
show examples
 drastically
amount
Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
show examples
 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
rental money is interminable in today's aeon. Controversy exists as it whether owning a home or renting a home is advantageous or not to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society. In
this
 essay, I will weigh up both merits and demerits along with my
creditude
Correct your spelling
credited
 with a befitting paradigm.
To begin
 with, owning an accommodation are a headache
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
 the owner, they should keep worrying about the
maintainence
Correct your spelling
maintenance
 and repair cost. Another observation related to
this
 case is that land price is increased in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
recent times ,especially in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
urban cities.
As a result
, many
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people borrow
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
money from the bank or other sectors leads
Change preposition
to
show examples
into
Change preposition
to
show examples
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
mental pressure that not
able
Add a missing verb
be able
show examples
 the debut amount from the bank. According to a recent survey, 36 % of people committed
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
suicide by putting
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
enormous pressure
from
Change preposition
on
show examples
 the bank to pay the loan. Another infamy root is that rental home provides a lot of facilities
such
 as furniture, security and so on.
Besides
, we can easily shift to new places without worrying about unnecessary things. To probe more deeply, if employee land
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
a new job in a new city, they can easily move into the new environment. Needless to say, all these points stand in good stead. In conclusion, owning to the above-stated reasons, I'm profoundly convinced
with
Change preposition
by
show examples
 the given statement that the pros of
this
 phenomenon overshadow the cons.
Submitted by dhivyaravi0396 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: