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Technology is becoming progressively universal in the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. do you agree or disagree on this.

#technology #fullness #time #classroom #teachers
In
this
 Present World, the usage of
technology
 is constantly on the rise.Even classrooms are among the many places that enjoy the usage and benefits of
technology
.it
is disagreed
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disagrees
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 that
classroom
teachers
 will be totally substituted for
technology
. Analysing the incapability of disciplining the
classroom
students
 with
technology
, as well as
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the limitation
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limitation
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limitations
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 in the learning process of
students
 taught with
technology
 will prove
this
.
Firstly
, A robotic teacher made with artificial intelligence would lack sufficient control over its
classroom
students
.
For Instance
, it is widely known that kids need to be thoroughly watched by their
teachers
 to be sure that they take their classwork seriously and do not fool around when classes are going on.sadly,
this
 is a task robotic
teachers
 will be incapable of carrying out.
Therefore
this
 makes it clear that
classroom
teachers
 will never be totally substituted for
technology
.
secondly
, the learning process of
students
 would be disrupted if they are taught by robotic
teachers
.which may slow down some
students
' ability to comprehend information taught in lessons.
For example
, kids love to be motivated before lessons are taught effectively.
this
 is a quality that many human crews have but robotic faculty do not have.
thus
 it becomes apparent that human faculty will be replaced with robotic faculty in a
classroom
. To summarise, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary discipline to properly give instructions to
students
.It
is disagreed
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disagrees
has disagreed
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 that
classroom
teachers
 will be totally substituted for
technology
. After
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through
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thorough
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 analysis
on
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this
 subject. it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over
technology
-driven teaching will always be greater than the
positives
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 effects, and because of
this
,
classroom
teachers
 will never be replaced
for
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by
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technology
.
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