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Some schools start teaching a foreign language in primary school. Do the advantages of teaching foreign languages to young children outweigh its disadvantages?

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There are different languages being spoken in the world, especially
English
 which became a crucial part of life. So, In my point of view, it is beneficial for children to learn a foreign
language
 which is imperative for their future.
Firstly
, In most
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schools,
English
 and French are compulsory subjects now. Which has many advantages. In today's era,most
of
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youngster
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 move to foreign countries for their higher studies which will help them to adapt to the environment. If students will start learning
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foreign
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language languages
language language
 in primary school it will help them in their basics.
Also
, a
country
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 like Canada,
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 USA
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 government jobs where
English
 is compulsory as well as french. So learning a new
language
 can bring different job opportunities.Moving
further
, when young ones move to another country or city
then
 they interact with new people with different languages and different cultures. So, teaching a foreign
language
 might help them mix in their surroundings.
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, I live in Canada but ,
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 am from Punjab. In my ,
school
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 I learned
English
 which helped me get here and do my higher studies.
English
 helped me get my job and in my studies as well. Moving towards the disadvantages, In my opinion when pupils learn a foreign
language
then
 they start forgetting their rituals, and traditions because they start distancing themselves from their grandparents and parents. They start taking it as a generation gap because their parents do not understand that
language
 because they never learned it in their institutes. Overall, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because in today's era learning
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different
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language languages
 became important with the increase of new gadgets and new inventions.
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