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Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #care
Environmental issues have been a well-discussed topic recently. Many
people
 think that nobody takes
care
 about pollution or weather in our world, and they claim more actions from national governments.
Nevertheless
, others explain that society is already aware about these problems and is it not necessary measures from the states. I agree that
people
 are not
care
 enough of
environment
 and in
this
 essay I am going to examine the reasons.
First,
In many countries are well-known that weather has been damaged
due to
 governments did not take the correct actions.
For example
: In china, there are several cities where is impossible to breathe because air pollution has been raised too high.
Therefore
,
people
 must use marks to can breathe,
otherwise
 life in these towns would be impossible.
This
 issues
also
 makes several natural disasters
such
 floods, droughts and Tsunamies.
On the other hand
, public do not much to change and help our world.
For instance
: It will be good that countries encourage them to recycle all organic waste. For intance: In Germany, is usually
people
 go to specifics green points and throw the rubbish separated by that it contains.
In addition
, these kind of actions help enviroment
along with
 the economy
hence
 many persons can work in the recycling industry creating a lot of jobs. there is a lot of evidence that says that if governments help, society will
also
 take
care
 about
environment
 .
To conclude
,
although
 some persons are awake of the need to recicle and take
care
 about
environment
, the majority of the population won´t help if nations don´t take appropite measures to protect
environment
 world. It is for these reasons that I conclude
people
 do not
care
 enough about environmental issues
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritize
  • immediate needs
  • connect with
  • distant
  • abstract
  • economic considerations
  • growing awareness
  • active participation
  • initiatives
  • movements
  • impacts
  • well-being
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