Some people think that humans can use animals for their benefits. Others believe that this practice is wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

For many centuries,
animals
have been used for many aspects
such
as food and medicine.
Hence
, stopping using
animals
for our benefit is impossible.
However
, I believe that we should not mistreat them for selfish purposes. On the one hand, it’s obviously understandable
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why many people oppose taking advantage
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animals
for personal reasons.
Although
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animal
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is unreplaceable protein source, people seem to depend on
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too much and ignore
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environment
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. At
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point, greenhouse gas from livestock is an example. Following
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, research by Robert Goodland and Jeff Anhang, the authors of Livestock and Climate Change, indicates that raising
animals
for food produces 51
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of global greenhouse gas emissions each year. Meanwhile, commercialize lab-grown meat which is an alternative way to raw meat, is not focused on investigating
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the study and development.
In other words
, I firmly believe that mistreating aminal for personal reasons is very cruel.
Subsequently
, many
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livestock
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using many evil ways
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head
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or putting them into boiled water which is against many ethical aspects.
Furthermore
, there are a number of bloody sports like cockfighting and dogfighting which are organized every day for enjoyment, while fighting they harm each other too
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that they died on spot.
Therefore
, governments should pay attention more to organizations or people that organize these terrible sports and give them some strong punishment. In conclusion, we have to depend on
animals
, which provide many benefits for
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.
Nevertheless
, in many ethical ways, we should treat
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less
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and stop using them for selfish reasons.
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