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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days, migration and tourism are two common ways to travel to a foreign country. For many
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, it is hard to keep up with a new
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,
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 have to deal with not solely severe social problems
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 face with practical problems. I tend to agree with
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 essay, I will support my view with examples. One of the most serious social obstacles is cultural shock. The
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 barrier is a cause of
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 issue. Many
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 found it very difficult to make friends when leaving in a foreign country, conversations are not just about food and weather, these contain several topics that require complex vocabulary. Some
people
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 said that in spite of having linguistic qualifications, they still have problems when talking with native speakers.
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, they usually do not develop good relationships with local citizens and prefer to stay within the confines of their own community.
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, my friend who
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 abroad in Canada, despite gaining a C1 level on an English test, said she was nervous when she have to debate topics with native students. Another reason for my belief is that the inability to the local dialect may limit job opportunities. Getting a job in
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language
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 requires a high level of fluency in a
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, even in work as low-paid as a waiver. So , many immigrants are affected by financial difficulties. Another problem relates to daily activities. If you have little or no knowledge of the local
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, it may be difficult to understand the contents of packaged goods,
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 as tins or cartons of food, or their cooking instructions, causing them to follow a limited diet. It is widely accepted that nowadays, with the development of technology,
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 could use an alternative tool
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 as Google translates to communicate with local
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, but it
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. To sum up, I agree that living in a country with poor access to the local
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 is challenging both socially and practically.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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