Some people think that humans can use animals for their benefits. Others believe that this practice is wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People
have been using
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the animal
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animal
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animals
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for their
benefits
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for a long time ago
since
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the caveman period to the modern time .But nowadays , there has been a heated controversy about whether
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human
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their advantage while others believe
this
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is wrong .So in
this
essay , I will discuss both
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and show which opinion I am likely to lean toward
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.
In a
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long time ago , especially
the
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cave man
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period .
Human
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Humans
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have been using
animals
for food and clothes which demand most of their basic need .
This
lead
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to the thinking that
animals
can solve many problems .
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that animal is an essential protein
provider
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the advocators of the viewpoint claim that
people
are too apathetic toward the impact on the environment and
moreover
, too
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on that resource and abandoned the investment into improving and commercializing lab-grown meat . A case in point is despite meat-like protein cultivated in a lab being scientifically possible but the cost to produce is too high , roughly 10000$ for 3 kg of meat grown in
lab
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a lab
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. We can
also
switch to
vegetarian
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diet which is more effective and brought out slightly less nutritious
as
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the
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meat-based meat .
On the other hand
,
people
also
use
animals
for experiments .
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we can’t argue about the efficiency
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these experiments as
it
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brought many benefits
for
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human’s
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medicine . A case in point
that
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before covid-19
vaccine
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vaccines
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were given out to
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. Scientists have tested it on
animals
to see the side effects of the vaccine . But it seems cruel to the
animals
since
animals
can feel pain and we tend to neglect it and keep using
animals
for experimenting . We need to provide proper medical
assistant
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to life-long
animals
and euthanize the
animals
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short-lifetime .
Moreover
,
people
having illness or cancer should be given a choice whether they could donate their body to the lab or
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die peacefully To sum up , I hold a firm
believe
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that we should reduce the
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of
animals
as smallest as possible and stop using them for not humane purposes .
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