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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#people #distance #program #study #home #benefit #college #universities
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 study is
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 ragged method. In
this
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 modern
people
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 it with internet resources.
Furthermore
, online learning is
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comforting
comfortable
, as they will obtain knowledge.
For instance
, many
people
 have duties at home so
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 unable to attend
collage
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college
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 or university
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,
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they
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but they
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 can deed their online
class
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classes
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 according to their schedules.
On the other hand
, it is clear that online education cannot replace the old method of teaching. As these changes can
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 influence
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their interpersonal skills,
such
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 peers. In
this
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face
 to
face
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 communication is crucial for
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students. Due to
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 they enhance more knowledge and will become a reasonable leader and speaker in the future.
For instance
,
people
 who cannot communicate with other
people
,
this
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will turn to
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 of
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, due to their career opportunities. In conclusion, I
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face
 to
face
 communication. Because,
this
 learning is very fruitful and
also
, they need an acceptable teacher in their life.
Moreover
, they will become a palatable leader and speaker in the future. And I believe that students should be taught at
university
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universities
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 and other institutions.
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