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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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program
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programs
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study
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people
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people
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the world is developing so that a lot of
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study
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internet
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study
. They can learn
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internet
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study
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they
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, they can learn a lot of things with the
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. And they conduct their online class according to their schedule.
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online to
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their interpersonal skills,
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 peers. And they can fast learn other subjects via offline
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people
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this
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online but the
internet
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face to
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face
. In conclusion, a lot of
people
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, I believe that
people
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study
 offline at school or university
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