Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or university. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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category
people
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of people
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use the
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distance
learning program to study at home, but
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category
people
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believe that it cannot bring the benefit as much
attending
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college
or
university
. I firmly agree with
this
view that face-to-face condensation is essential. Some
people
say that technologies have been developing extremely. That's why
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people
consume distance learning
program
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programs
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to study
an
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education at home.
For example
, they have duties at home so they
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to attend
college
or
university
but they can conduct their online class according to their schedules. Because some
people
could not
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go to these places to study.
On the other hand
, more and more
people
prefer
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go to
college
or
university
every day.
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, if they go to
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college
or
university
, they will take
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education
by
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intelligent teachers.
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,
people
who cannot communicate with other
people
,
this
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will turn to
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of confidence, due to which
this
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can damage of their career opportunities. Due to
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they enhance more knowledge and
they
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go to
university
to become a good leader and speaker in the future. In conclusion,
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many
people
reckon online studying is beneficial for
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citizens. In regards, I believe that students should be taught at
university
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and other academic institutions as nowadays, distance learning cannot replace the old methods.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
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  • Self-paced
  • Remote areas
  • Specializations
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Affordable
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  • Time management
  • Independent work
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Professional networks
  • Collaborative learning
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Technological issues
  • Reliable internet
  • Educational experience
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