Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or university. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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believe that it cannot bring the benefit as much
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view that face-to-face condensation is essential. Some
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consume distance learning
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to study
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education at home.
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to attend
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but they can conduct their online class according to their schedules. Because some
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go to these places to study.
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go to
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every day.
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, they will take
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education
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intelligent teachers.
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who cannot communicate with other
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of confidence, due to which
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can damage of their career opportunities. Due to
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they enhance more knowledge and
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go to
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to become a good leader and speaker in the future. In conclusion,
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reckon online studying is beneficial for
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citizens. In regards, I believe that students should be taught at
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and other academic institutions as nowadays, distance learning cannot replace the old methods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • Flexibility
  • Convenience
  • Self-paced
  • Remote areas
  • Specializations
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Affordable
  • Self-discipline
  • Time management
  • Independent work
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Professional networks
  • Collaborative learning
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Technological issues
  • Reliable internet
  • Educational experience
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