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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or university. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#people #distance #program #study #home #benefit #college #university
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people
.
First
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 category
people
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of people
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 use the
distence
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distance
 learning program to study at home, but
second
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 category
people
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 believe that it cannot bring the benefit as much
attending
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college
 or
university
. I firmly agree with
this
 view that face-to-face condensation is essential. Some
people
 say that technologies have been developing extremely. That's why
,
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The
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people
 consume distance learning
program
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programs
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 to study
an
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education at home.
For example
, they have duties at home so they
unable
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 to attend
college
 or
university
 but they can conduct their online class according to their schedules. Because some
people
 could not
to
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go to these places to study.
On the other hand
, more and more
people
prefer
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 go to
college
 or
university
 every day.
However
, if they go to
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college
 or
university
, they will take
top quality
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 education
by
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 intelligent teachers.
For example
,
people
 who cannot communicate with other
people
,
this
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will turn to
lack
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 of confidence, due to which
this
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can damage of their career opportunities. Due to
which
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 they enhance more knowledge and
they
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go to
university
 to become a good leader and speaker in the future. In conclusion,
Although
 many
people
 reckon online studying is beneficial for
the
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citizens. In regards, I believe that students should be taught at
university
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universities
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 and other academic institutions as nowadays, distance learning cannot replace the old methods.
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