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Many children these days have their own mobile phones. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Mobile phones became versatile
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 these days. As it has more features, with the help of access to various apps for different purposes. In ,particular
children
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 having a mobile phone can be useful for enhancing cognitive and intellectual skills. ,
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 it will adversely affect the
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 the other way around if they are using it for gaming or watching it often for recreational purposes.
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 with, modern-day advancements offer interactive learning with the help of the internet. These include video and audio recordings with captions.
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 encompasses Questions and answers in the middle of the video to stay active and focused.
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 most online learning involves pictures and illustrations of a subject or a topic. which escalates the engagement of viewers
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 with conventional classes where most of them taught are in text and spoken words.
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, it is true fact that most
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 overuse mobile phones for playing games and binge-watching. Which will drastically affect their study and health. Often nowadays
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 with addiction to games and videos often have physical illnesses
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 as myopia, sleep deprivation, and obesity. on the other ,hand it affects their mental health too. Which will be the biggest threat to them in near future.
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 engaging in mobile phones frequently increases social isolation. which will be another disadvantage. To conclude, using mobile wisely and concisely for educational purposes will help in nurturing the growth of
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 if it is not controlled over playing games and recreational videos it will have a negative impact on them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emergencies
  • enhance learning
  • educational apps
  • monitoring
  • digital skills
  • distraction
  • face-to-face interactions
  • social development
  • physical health problems
  • inappropriate content
  • prolonged use
  • eye strain
  • sleep disturbances
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