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The technology generates language translation software, decreasing the importance of learning more languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#technology #language #translation #software #importance #languages
Nowadays a lot of
people
 are trying to quit to
smoke
 because it affects
health
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. We all know what is happening
with
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to
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 us during
the
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smoking but
people
 go on to kill themselves slowly. I’m considering several steps to quit to
smoke
. The
first
 step is that you need to understand and
then
to
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admit that you
don’t
 need
the
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bad habits
such
a
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as
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 smoking.
Then
 you need a replacement, I mean that you should find something that can distract
from
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you from
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 your habit. And
thirdly
 you need to search
a
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motivation. When you will be able to search
the
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reason
 which can motivate you to break the habit, you have to be patient and attempt not to get stressed out because it influence
on
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your progress.
For example
, I have a friend who could quit
to
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smoke
 due to he could find motivation. He finds a girlfriend and he didn’t want that
the
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passive smoking influenced her.
On the other hand
, why the most
of
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the
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smoking
people
 just
don’t
 try to break their habits
.
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May be
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Maybe
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the
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they
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don’t
 want it. If somebody can consider me unfounded,
for
example
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 I couldn’t quit
to
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smoking
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smoke
 already four years. Somebody can think that if I can’t quit
how
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now
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 I can
reason
 on
this
 issue
.
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 I can answer that I just couldn’t find the
reason
 and the motivation to quit. But
may be
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maybe
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 subconsciously I
don’t
 want it. Sometimes I think
that smoking
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that smoking person
those smoking people
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people
 just try to search
privacy
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for privacy
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 time during
the
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work or simply so for
a
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thinking about something alone. Each person can decide when and how he wants to quit. Nobody knows the quitting formula. In
conclusion
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 I want to say that each person
have
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 to find his way to quit to
smoke
,
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 because any
reason
 for
support
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 smoking is just an excuse.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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