Some people think that human can use animals for their benefits. Others believe that this practice is wrong. Dicuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Animals
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’ contributions to the advancement of human beings have been deeply carved into
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history since the very early days.
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is because these living creatures have played a significant part in humans’ daily lives from supplying
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nutritious food to manning their duty of maintaining a balanced
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.
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, there has recently been a heated debate
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whether we should continue
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inhumane exploitation for human welfare or
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should be stopped as being immoral. In
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I am going to thoroughly explain why civilized human beings should consider switching to and developing new alternative sources while curbing our dependency on
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with extensive humane practices. On the one
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it’s distressingly understandable
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why a surging population has taken
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to condemn
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the overexploitation
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of
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for humanity’s selfish gains. These advocators claim our raising
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for food and other consumer products is not only cruel but
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damaging to the environment. The accusation is vividly accurate since some developing and under-developed parts of the globe are still adopting the very cruel way to exploit
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’ meat
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as slitting the
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without euthanizing them.
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exploitative farming techniques including pasture-raised and feedlots have contributed greatly to the total amount of greenhouse gases, 51% of the total in the US as
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recent report.
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worrying amount could have been cut
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if human beings switch to an alternative source of protein.
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,
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, we can’t totally withdraw our reliance on
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because many of our scientific fields like medicine are rather under-facilitated. A case in point is that
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in most drug testing cases humans are still in need of
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for medical trials assessing drugs’ efficacy. In conclusion, I do support the viewpoint of less using
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for our
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. Changing our habit
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from little
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in our ability
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as using vegan products in fashion, food, etc to reduce the amount of killing
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for getting human advantages.
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