Parents should take course in Parenting, in order to improve the lives of their children. To what extend do you agree?

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important
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conduct parenting
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for being
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parents
.
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course would help to take care
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babies but it
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those people,
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have already
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parents
because they know how to protect their children. I am against
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to being
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to how
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improve
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. My explanation is in the ensuing paragraphs.
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is not
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mission. There are many
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increase to take their kids. The parenting course
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that
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how to care
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baby , what types of
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foods and all
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techine
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teaching
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of
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new
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those people who become
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all these things.
Moreover
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countries because
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their families. So, they need to know to
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of
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new bones babies.
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own unique character and behaviour. The classes provide general information
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about
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The instructor
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can not teach
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to all
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child
.
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,
one
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is
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one
is talkative and
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but these
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classes
tought
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taught
general information
how
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to
procted
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proceed
protected
their
child
.
In addition
,
to
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being
parents
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parent
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is
natural
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process , and
therefore
the skills required to be
one
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, these courses are
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so
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, it can not effort everyone. In conclusion, the
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mother and father is god gifted. So, everyone
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with
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this
situation. The courses give
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of information
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to eye
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their children,while, it is different
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all babies.
Therefore
, I disagree with
this
viewpoint.
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