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More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reason for this? What are the solutions?

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Nowadays,
people
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 are fond of fast food and beverages which contain high
sugar
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, which is extremely dangerous for their
health
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. I will explain various reasons why
people
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 consume that
types
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 of
drinks
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 and
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 give a solution to
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 solution.
To begin
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 with, there are many reasons of
people
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 consume
sugar
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-based
drinks
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 .
Firstly
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, today's advertising industry plays a vital role in every area. advertisement manipulates
people
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 that purchase things and try them.
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, the advertising industry hires highly valuable and glamorous stars.
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 flocks think that the stars
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 consume these
types
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 of
drinks
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.
Secondly
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, The soft drink manufacturing industry
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 invests in and sponsored international sports and other activities.
As a result
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, youngsters attract to that
types
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 of
drinks
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.
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, the Coca-Cola Company was sponsored by IPL and other tournament matches and the big star Salman Khan was
also
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 a brand Ambassador of the Coca-cola company.
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, every soft drink has a good taste and contains some percentage of caffeine so, over and over time consumption would be habitual which leads to
health
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 problems. There are various solutions for decreasing the consumption of
sugar
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-based
drinks
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 .
Firstly
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, humans should
also
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 consume beverages in routine life and
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 shows written content of
sugar
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 in every drink.
Secondly
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, companies should manufacture alternative options of
sugar
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drinks
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 and diet coco-cola which contain only 5% of
sugar
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. It helps to humans keep fitting and their
health
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.
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, the government should conduct healthy diet campaigns to awareness among citizens. In conclusion ,
sugar
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-based beverages create a lot of
health
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 issues.
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, human beings are aware of these
types
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 of
drinks
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 and are less consumed in daily life.

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