Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A school of
thoughts
hold that giving longer custodial sentences is the best Fix the agreement mistake
thought
way
to cut down on crime
. Others, however
, believe that there are many difference
ways to reduce Replace the word
different
crime
. In this
essay, I am going to eclucidate
both 2 statements, before Correct your spelling
elucidate
explaing
why I partly agree with Correct your spelling
explaining
prison
sentences.
Firstly
, this
punishment can separate dangerous individuals from the world. In the other words, if there were no law
for bad Fix the agreement mistake
laws
behaviors
, Change the spelling
behaviours
this
world would become chaos. Conversely
, prison
will be the most effective solution to solve this
phenomenon as prisons are the only place which can instill
a set of correct moral behaviours into them. Change the spelling
instil
Therefore
, the world will be more stable and safer. Secondly
, custodial sentences can also
deter those who want to commit crimes. It can be explained by the fact that the harshness of prison
and a controlled lifestyle is something that nobody want
. Change the verb form
wants
For instance
, when they have intented
to murder, the radio is playing Correct your spelling
intended
invented
intent
a breaking news
about 2 Remove the article
breaking news
a piece of breaking news
man
Change to a plural noun
men
were
sentenced to death Correct pronoun usage
who were
this
morning because of killing a family.
There are several non-custodial sentence
that can be used to alleviate criminals. One Change to a plural noun
sentences
way
to tackle this
is to make great administrative fines if they do such
bad activities. By doing this
, it will hepl
them to think again before committing a Correct your spelling
help
crime
due to the lager
amount of money. Another alternative Correct your spelling
larger
way
that Correct article usage
the goverment
goverment
can supervise their daily life Correct your spelling
government
by
using electronic tagging. For Add a missing verb
is by
examle
, they stole money Correct your spelling
example
in
the bank and had been arrested. Change preposition
from
In stead
of putting them in jail, Correct your spelling
Instead
Correct article usage
the goverment
goverment
would still give them a chance by allowing them to work and live normally but under government control. Correct your spelling
government
movement
This
may lead to change
Correct article usage
a change
their
bad Change preposition
in their
way
of thinking and intentions.
In conclusion, having training in prison
are
the most effective solution Change the verb form
is
for
the problem. If governments implemented these solutions, Change preposition
to
crime
figures would soon drop.Submitted by trancaomaitrang on
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