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The major cities in the world are growing fast, as well as their problems. What are the problems that young people living in cities are facing? Give solutions to this.

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The diagram demonstrates the chocolate production process. Overall,
this
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 process contains ten steps. It begins with growing cacao trees and ends with producing liquid chocolate.
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 with, cacao trees are grown till the pods become red, which means they are ripe.
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, they are harvested by manually splitting
open
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them open
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 to take out white cocoa
beans
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. After,
beans
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 are fermented under several leaves before
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being spreaded
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spreaded
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spread
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 in the hot temperature of the sun to dry.
At
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 the fifth step, workers put them in large sacks and weights.
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 the following step, sacks of dried
beans
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 are transported by train and lorry.
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, they are taken to a factory.
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 is followed by
beans
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 being roasted at 350 celsius. After, they are processed with a crushing tool to remove outer shells.
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 the
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 step, the inner part of pressed liquid chocolate is produced.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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