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Museums should display art of their own country or they should display art from all our the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Museums
 are an integral part of our society, and they capture
the
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history and
culture
 for future generations. Question of whether
museums
 exhibit
the
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local
culture
 or
world
 heritage is a source of controversy for many
countries
.
This
 essay presents a detailed analysis of both agreement and disagreement for showcasing local or
world
arts
 in
museums
 by various
countries
. Few
countries
 are very keen on promoting their
culture
 to foreign
visitors
 and most of the
country
's governments consider displaying
country's
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the country's
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arts
 in the museum
is
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as
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 the best place. Promoting food ,festivals and
culture
 to the
world
 has global opportunities in terms of adopting food habits , and fashion by
world
 communities. These
countries
 strongly believe that their
culture
 is superior and requires a venue and
museums
 are considered to be top on the list. Few
countries
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country's
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museums
 display
arts
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art
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 not only from their
country
 but
also
 from
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the worlds
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worlds
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world's
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arts
. The main reason is to show respect for the
arts
 of the rest of the
world
.
For example
 , the Salarjung museum in India has a separate building to show both local and
world
 art so that foreign
visitors
 have a great impression and appreciate the respect India exhibits to the
world
.
Visitors
 have an opportunity to compare and contrast various
arts
 and try to adopt them in their life and
also
 useful for foreign
visitors
 to mingle with locals. In conclusion, the decision of
arts
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 display specific to
country
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a country
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 or
world
 purely depends on the
country
's objective.Governments should have policies in place which allows one's
country
 to display either local art or
world
 art.
Museums
 are the sources capturing the history of
arts
 for various
countries
.
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